Unspoken Whisper (Meg poem, based on the novel)

[Little Giry]

Howdy. 'Tis my first 'Meg poem', based on the original novel or on the ALW musical (works well for any), it's so not that great for, it's only the second Phantom poem I've written- so I'm completely open to criticism.

Anyway, this is based on the thoughts of Meg when she is realizing that this 'Opera Ghost', is really, not a ghost, etc. So you can imagine all that goes through her mind, and that's why it’s intended to kind of sound confusing, in a way.

Enjoy (hopefully).

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Unspoken Whisper

Drops of illusions anew this ring of strings
And moment and moment falling deeper
My own amusement of this spell

Intrigued and concrete
The questions will kill
And those answers that are blank and dry
The bleeding glass is left behind

Riddles of frolic and fun
Friends of death and torture
A game that joined us by disguise
Blown onto a string of immense gawk

And this answer that I find
Another question it is
Hypnotize the fatal daylight

Dancing with hell
And all the pieces will cry
Tears of reality’s beach of fire and water
Quickly nothing ends
The burning glory has begun

[phantomgirl110]

I really like it! One thing I especially notice about it is that I can really feel the emotion in it. You said it's meant to sound confusing and it does in places, but in a good way; it's deep. Great job!

...sorry if that sounded bizare, I've never been a great reviewer of poetry. But the bottom line is: I really like it. ^_^

[Opera Angel]

Me too...not my style but I wish i could write with such description and feeling very good